Rough Cut Feedback

Completed by Ruby and Amie 

We showed the class our rough cut music video and asked them to write down feedback. We received both positive and negative as well as suggestions.  

Our main issue was our performance which consisted of a closeup:
Differences in opinion about the close up performance; some said the closeups looks good, others say they look strange with the narrative, the performance shots should be varied, the closeup is too extreme, closeup gets repetitive.

What Went Well:
+ good lip-syncing
+ Camden Lock looks good and suits the song
+ reflection in the train window is effective
+ nice still shots
+ good walking shot
+ good use of mise-en-scene as it works with the song
+ lovely candle shot which works well
+ like the ending
+ good range of shots
+ some good ideas
+ good use of different locations
+ like the calmness of it
+ good British narrative for a British song
+ outfits work well 

Even Better If: - dodgy zooms and tilts
- don't like her stopping by the horse
- doesn't work with her staring at the camera
- didn't like the last shot
- don't understand the books relevance 
- some background sound still in 
- lighting for the narrative needs correcting
- some shots are too long
- not much narrative progression 
- have a better mise-en-scene
- don't like the tracking wood shot

Other Suggestions:
- include a piano
- more emotion in her face when she is singing
- use the light scene more
- performance should be more interesting
- show the man she is singing about